Knock- Haiku
by
Asim Nehal
Wind hits again
Heart beats fast again
woodpecker knocks.
Heart beats fast again
woodpecker knocks.
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Poetry.com 4.6 out of 5 based on 8 votes.
keep it up
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terse and telling.................pls. go through my poem 'true love is like this only' and suggest any.............thnx for the last reviews
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Confused. But Nice!!!
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I don't care I love it anyways!
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well done
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made me go back and read some haiku's by Bosha Kabata and Seishi Yamaguchi...nice
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Liking Haiku's atm.
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Almost Haiku. Please don't be offended. Haiku has 5 syllables in first line, 7 in second and 5 in third.
It never rhymes and is always about nature. Most people on this site do not care if it is about nature. This subject is perfect for Haiku. The word again should only be used once at the end of the line. This is easy to fix by adding The to the first line then second line something like my heart beats even faster. and start the third line with the.
Most people here don't even know what Haiku is but this is perfectly haiku if the syllables are right.
Great thoughts. I love it
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