Haiku---Hiding
by
Carole Hearn
Muddy waters still
Covering things beneath it
No reflection there
Covering things beneath it
No reflection there
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Poetry.com 3.8 out of 5 based on 4 votes.
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nice no clear reflection from the crystal waters
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the water floats clear
and all the rocks are showing
their layers of mud
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Nicely put, well written with poetic flare. Nice flow of words attracting the reader with their simplicity and emotional impact resulting in a pleasant sounding poem with all the right syllable count. Good Job!
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I haven't read Haiku for some time. So, this was a fresh breath. However, it feels like the poem needs more refining. Thanks for sharing though. It's quite deep and produces an acute feeling of demand for clarity and transparency through the use of the words - "still", "waters", "reflection" and their contextual antonyms of "muddy", "covering ... beneath", and "no".
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