in the middle (study á la Sobin)
...our heart
pulses, un-
remitting, quicker to slow and
stopping, but
not.
this moment
ineluctable, will forever sear
the backs of retinas, your-
self and
I
are one.
pulses, un-
remitting, quicker to slow and
stopping, but
not.
this moment
ineluctable, will forever sear
the backs of retinas, your-
self and
I
are one.
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study a la Sobin
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Poetry.com 4.1 out of 5 based on 9 votes.
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love it!
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cool
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i get it dude
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But it is sinking in! Also, I looked at Sobin's stuff. I see the influence!
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I see you are experimenting!
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I like the EKG look to it, and the daring enjambment throughout. A poem like this could have me read and re-read looking for more meaning in case I missed it. Well done.
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Very nice and I don't even know who or what Sobin is Still tho niceee
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I'm lost in the actual meaning
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Not. Try again!
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