Lost Sky
Lost in the sky.
Breathing the air,
You can't count on things,
That are not there,
Surrounded by walls,
Trapped in time,
Caught up in words,
Turning to rhyme,
Consumed by sound,
Or feeling alone,
The darkness sets forth,
A deeper tone...........................BAD-Mc..<3
Breathing the air,
You can't count on things,
That are not there,
Surrounded by walls,
Trapped in time,
Caught up in words,
Turning to rhyme,
Consumed by sound,
Or feeling alone,
The darkness sets forth,
A deeper tone...........................BAD-Mc..<3
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Poetry.com 4.5 out of 5 based on 23 votes.
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nice writing style
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Enjoyed every word of it....................
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I love your style and I love the mystery behind your words.
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Loved it!!
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Nice and simple but has so much meaning in what you said.
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Love it...
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A feel good poem
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The way this was presented was a awesomely done job!
You maintained a perfect pace, As you applied a deeper and deeper; meaning as every word passed.
I must ask one thing, What inspired you?
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I really empathize with this feeling.. Short and to the point.
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"A thousand imaginations Bouncing in one space of interaction, could create the possibility of the unimaginable to happen. by theory." -The incredible nocturnal poet R.C
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“Lost poets society”
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and I love this part:
Surrounded by walls,
Trapped in time,
Caught up in words,
Turning to rhyme,
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i just loved the way you set up your feelings it is amazing you are really talented....keep on writing
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I love the flow, a smooth read with good thought form!
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I really liked it
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I see you're not the only poet hell bent on self deprecation :) nice meter
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Feeling trapped is the image I get considering the walls are present time traps some but time ticks and waits for no one nice imagery
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consumed by sound....
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Excellent poem..nice little twist at the end
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Caught up in words,
Turning to rhyme,
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good
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I enjoyed the feeling i get while reading it. Thanks for sharing! keep up the writing
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I do like this poem, but it's falling just a little short for me. Maybe it's the metrical format. I'm pretty sure I would enjoy this even more as free (or blank) verse. :)
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Ineed more metaphorical language.I do like the poem.
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