Leap of Faith
by
Thomas King
Forlorn in demeanor; thyself with heart in tatters.
Solemn and beseeched,
I'm near the edge of loves rapturous foreboding precipice.
Shall my torturous soul commit it’s self to the abyssal unknowns
of sacrificial acquiescence to thee?
a force neither trustworthy nor forgiving
as it warms chilled hearts and sooths with passionate death.
Unwitting those of lesser toils within,
true to their salvation and blind to its deceit
and give reverence to thee.
Alas shall I not gaze into eyes of splendor
nor smell tasteful aromas upon sweet lips?
Forsake the essence of purity sought,
of righteous happenings within thy being?
To this unknown I ponder
and thus negates my apotheosis of thee,
enlighten my sorrowful remnants of gayety
and subservient obedience to thee
as was once remembered.
At this I shall take that leap of faith
and boldly plunge thyself into the depths
of your infinite sanctity
Solemn and beseeched,
I'm near the edge of loves rapturous foreboding precipice.
Shall my torturous soul commit it’s self to the abyssal unknowns
of sacrificial acquiescence to thee?
a force neither trustworthy nor forgiving
as it warms chilled hearts and sooths with passionate death.
Unwitting those of lesser toils within,
true to their salvation and blind to its deceit
and give reverence to thee.
Alas shall I not gaze into eyes of splendor
nor smell tasteful aromas upon sweet lips?
Forsake the essence of purity sought,
of righteous happenings within thy being?
To this unknown I ponder
and thus negates my apotheosis of thee,
enlighten my sorrowful remnants of gayety
and subservient obedience to thee
as was once remembered.
At this I shall take that leap of faith
and boldly plunge thyself into the depths
of your infinite sanctity
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Poetry.com 4.1 out of 5 based on 7 votes.
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It is like the work of the old Masters...
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They are right its very powerful and very deep + very Shakespere....i guess thats why i loved it....but to others who don't understand Shakespere,its hard for them to grasp a poem like this in this day and age....lol
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Great job (:
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Speechlesssssssss..love it..
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Its good and very Shakespere-like but I think a tad overdone. I agree with Terry, write in your own voice, it will speak to more people (if thats your goal)
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It loses me a little deep but powerful words
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Where to begin. Spelling errors. "Smell tasteful aromas"? But the biggest problem I have with this is the language. Write the way you speak. The language is outdated for the times. Edit, edit, edit. You have a passion for the written word but poetry is meant to be read outloud. Read it outloud and see if you can make your vision clearer to the reader.
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