Scars for Wings
These burns on my back, these marks, these scars
a brand for us few that know who we are.
Cast from the heavens by an almighty judge,
we pleade guilty as charged, guilty of love.
Sentenced to an eternity in the fiery lake
so that the true sinners may be at peace within the pearly gates.
"You hate all opposing religions? Good, come right in!"
"You love all people equally? Why you're writhing with sin!"
As I fell they called me faithless, among other spiteful things,
but it takes a whole lot of faith to fly with scars for wings.
a brand for us few that know who we are.
Cast from the heavens by an almighty judge,
we pleade guilty as charged, guilty of love.
Sentenced to an eternity in the fiery lake
so that the true sinners may be at peace within the pearly gates.
"You hate all opposing religions? Good, come right in!"
"You love all people equally? Why you're writhing with sin!"
As I fell they called me faithless, among other spiteful things,
but it takes a whole lot of faith to fly with scars for wings.
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Poetry.com 4.3 out of 5 based on 4 votes.
In the present poem Sir christian Gentry wishes to confirm that all human beings are equal and created by only one God who is omnipresent and omnipotent. No one could defy His majesty. Everybody has right to anyone may belong to any part of the universe as we all are equal in order to origin and creed. Poet wants to warn those has created fractions between one to another by dividing with shadow of religious trust. It has an symbolic indescribable theme.
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Good poem with a fantastic, sealing final line. Though I dare suggest more work on the core of the poem. Just to keep the flow going smoothly. No change needed, but this poem might benefit from it.
Again, fantastic poem. Thank you so much for sharing it!
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Somewhat an inversion of the Biblical account, but compelling none the less. The brand is used symbolically as a sign of the true faithful. The dialogue in lines 3 and 7 and 8 appears to have taken place in heaven, since it is placed before the reference to the fall. And this Lucifer like hero seeks to be on the side of man, not against him. The warring in heaven was an act of prideful disobedience. Here it is presented as an act of love. The eternal burning was anything but an atonement for sinners. There is great irony in the poem. I read it several times and cannot find a clue to the rendering to the novel tradition created.
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