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FIRST CONFESSION

 
When we were six years old
innocent to life’s evil
partial to youthful mischief
ignorant to confession
 
Our teacher one day told us
to go to the parish priest
for our first confession of sin
perhaps then we may start anew
 
 We made our way
 down the long lane
the granite stone twinkled
bathed in the sunlight  
 
Our round faces shining
 awash with innocence
merriment and folly
 was our need and endeavour
 
Voices rose unchallenged
 upon the breast of early spring
captured by the early hour
 we marched like an army of ants
 
We were free and untamed
broken from the drudge
the dragging soulless feet
 of a never ending school day
 
The lane neared its end
 as in the distance stood with pride
the great spire of the chapel reaching
 our freshened cheeks in enchanted awe
 
The parish priest stood waiting
hands squeezed tightly by his side
upon his face a venomous stare
sternly  with open eyed fierceness 

Our mad stomp abruptly stopped
we were free no more
the fresh gleam had frozen
as he led us like lambs to slaughter
 
We filed in slowly and frightened
the church of god was vast
washed in an eerie silence
a dead chill laid upon the air
 
Asked to confess for innocent sins
kicking dogs or apples stolen
twenty five years since I have been
now many confessions I could have told
 
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clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
this was a simple idea that grew as i travelled in time and relived the memory thank you for sharing your thoughts, comments and reviews
Poetry.com 4.8 out of 5 based on 0 ratings. 43 reviews.
Migdalia Burgoin More than 1 year ago
You were taught t imperfection as a child and in a way, was taught to BE imperfect. that's what i take from this. wonderful work my friend-as usual
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
do you think , very interesting thoughts dalia, thank you
Charmaine Torre More than 1 year ago
that's beautiful.
Asim Nehal More than 1 year ago
One can easily related to this poem..Well written my friend Clifton
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you asim my friend
Stacy Gardner More than 1 year ago
Vivid imagery, excellent recount and a truly wonderful write!
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you stacy
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
on this poem , sorry its so long
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
i appreciate the support
tj hatton More than 1 year ago
Short or Long your poems & story's are always pure & meaningfull. TJ.
Randy Nii More than 1 year ago
blah blah blah on the funoogies,,,this was great
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thanks lads
dylan suppiah More than 1 year ago
Love your writings!
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you dylan
Christina Peskowa More than 1 year ago
mature poem!
Christina Peskowa More than 1 year ago
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D0kSZlbd4X0&feature=plcp this is a song with my words - "Crazy Ideas"
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you christina it was awesome i loved it,
Joanna Lawlor Redmond More than 1 year ago
you told this story with lovely descriptions
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you jo
Ging Alburo More than 1 year ago
Keep up the good work....:)
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you ging
Mathilde Dumas More than 1 year ago
Nicely written, with captivating descripitions :) I could relate and live back the same age and the same feelings, when I asked to the other girls "and you, what will you say ?" :)
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
oh yas i do remember i just made up that i stole a pencil in school ha, thank you for reading and your comment you are an outstanding poetess
Mariya M. Jos More than 1 year ago
This poem made me remember about my first confessin on the day before my holy communion......Cherishing the memories that was at the verge of perishing
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you mariya im glad i could reignite these memories that is how i felt writing this
martha de Jongh More than 1 year ago
This made me cry, I could relate 100%. Youve told a very long sad story iwith a powerful and clear poem. Brilliant.
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you martha
S. Subhashini More than 1 year ago
Beautifully written
tj hatton More than 1 year ago
Funny it always sticks in your mind perhapes it was innocent guilt? Nice one clifton TJ.
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
yes tj it just might be thank you my friend, if you ever get on f.b there are two sites there where we poets share purely for the love of poetry you would be very welcome
tj hatton More than 1 year ago
Thankyou clifton TJ.
Andreas Evangelos Vanezis More than 1 year ago
I'm speechless
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you andreas
Jyrone Denny More than 1 year ago
An excellent poem. You are a great storyteller, my friend. Well done, Clifton!
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you jyronne i appreciate your review
Wallace LaBenne More than 1 year ago
Well conceived and composed..
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you wallace
Gabriel Mican More than 1 year ago
great poem
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you gabbi
tony right More than 1 year ago
plenty vivid descriptions...a great write
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you tony
Hari More than 1 year ago
Flows like a river; Unimpeded by pebbles under; The rhythm rings true to melody, that sings praises and raises the hat for you, my friend, Clifton.
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank tyou hari
Oliver Sherman More than 1 year ago
Great Story, vivid imagery. I really felt like I was there. I was confirmed in the catholic church so I know about the fear of the confessional. I really feel that no man is worthy of my confession, God alone is infallible. But I digress, this is indeed a great work sir.
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
i know how you feel , thank you oliver im very glad you liked this
Khalil Goddard More than 1 year ago
I can only admire this, I don't know how to review such a brilliant work. I have to thank you for posting it and now I am going to stop typing and read it again, out loud.
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
haha thanks khalil im honoured by your review it has brought a smile to my face
Khalil Goddard More than 1 year ago
I would love to hear you reading this masterpiece.
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
haha i have had this conversation with dalia before, i have tried recording my work but a very common irishmans accent is hard to understand and not really ideal for poetry , lol
Khalil Goddard More than 1 year ago
The Irish language was born for poetry and the accent when you speak English has its own distinctive and beautiful rhythm.
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you my friend i will give it a try soon , you are a true gentleman, i'll send you the piece when it is done, do you record your poems
Khalil Goddard More than 1 year ago
Not usually but I have made recordings of a couple of my horror poems for Mathilde, she says it makes them feel more chilling! I think the recordings - done on my mobile phone - are pretty poor. But I think you should try it; Iontaobhas do ghuth!
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
i would love to hear them , those are some great and haunting poems, and thank you
Patricia Batteate More than 1 year ago
Oh how I do remember that day and you hit the nail right on the head. I just relived an event of my life so distant in the past. Well done, Maybe you can write one about the first communion. Now there is a story. God Bless
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you patricia
Dave Ratcliffe More than 1 year ago
....my first confession, you take me back to a day I will never forget and the description is so vivid in my mind As for the message ....We were once so pure and innocent and with a conscience more terrifying then today and yet we had nothing much to confess (I took a sledgehammer from a building site to see the face of the builder the next day) I now look at the things we have on our personal charge sheet and blush Wonderful memories flooding by right now along with element of fear that the priest himself empowered on us poor young pups (Father Banks you have left your mark.......... in a good way might I add Love it Clifton
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you dave you have captured the essence of exactly every thought that i was trying to convey thank you my friend
joy balan More than 1 year ago
i like the way the poem flows . well done
clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
thank you joy
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