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Her Maimed Soul

the sequel to “Unearthly” http://www.poetry.com/poems/577700-Unearthly-
 
So faint she got, but also strong
For mental wounds heal very slow.
Her maimed soul hums a song
Of girl whose pain can only grow.
 
Her memory sends her back in time
When air was imbued with smell
Of love begetting flawless rhyme.
Through silence our hearts can tell.
 
She does remember brown eyes,
His caring and amatory stare.
Her body gets all paralyzed
As flashback turns into nightmare.
 
Those humans ruined the abode,
The world in which she used to love.
Since then her lips have felt the cold –
The time of bliss was not enough.
 
She boldly looked into the barrel,
Feeling the shadow of death.
Like ailing rose losing petals
Her blind love drew its last breath.
 
The one she loved lay on the ground,
Had hidden her from fatal shot.
And poignant tears lacked for sound –
The heart retains what eyes forgot.
 
So faint she got, but also strong
For mental wounds heal very slow.
Her maimed soul hums a song
Of girl whose pain can only grow.
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Tejinder Singh More than 1 year ago
very good
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Tejinder)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
NICE
Ksu__Mironova More than 1 year ago
it seems like it gotta be continued
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you a lot, Ksu)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Naomi Buote More than 1 year ago
portrayed beautifully with words
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Naomi)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Peter J Brown More than 1 year ago
Some great lines here 'Her maimed soul hums a song'. I very much enjoyed this sequel about the girl who lost her planet. Nice one Den :) Please check this out, your opinion would be appreciated: http://poetry.com/poems/583416-Elemental-
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you a lot, Peter) i will
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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clifton redmond More than 1 year ago
what a talent you are den, i look forward to yoir great poetry and you never let me down
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you so much, Clifton) you're very kind
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Stacy Gardner More than 1 year ago
Those are some deep fingerprints! Well done!!!
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Stacy)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Ali Eversole More than 1 year ago
U made the tears flow
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Mathilde Dumas More than 1 year ago
A sad story but so perfectly painted. Great work Den.
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Mathilde)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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joy balan More than 1 year ago
wow the pain was almost palpable. wonderful poem!
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Joy)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Joey Jones More than 1 year ago
Very vivid imagery and an exceptional story as well. Bravo! Loved the bookending with the first and last two stanzas!
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Joey)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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I am Me More than 1 year ago
wonderful!!! very touching made me teary eyed....
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you much)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Ian More than 1 year ago
you suprised me with that part, in a good way
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Ian)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Christina Peskowa More than 1 year ago
and excellently described - amazing poem! please, visit http://www.poetry.com/poems/587419-My-Heart-Belongs-to-You
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you a lot, Christina) i will
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Simon Elliott More than 1 year ago
Alot of pain there.
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
Thank you, Simon)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
NICE
Helema Jones More than 1 year ago
Sad but inspiring, thank you for sharing
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Helema)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Farida Amin More than 1 year ago
powerful and emotional
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Farida)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Sandra Meadows More than 1 year ago
Kudos!
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Sandra)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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James Barnett More than 1 year ago
amazing poem mate... great job
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you much, James)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Ashok Babu More than 1 year ago
one of your best Den... pls visit http://poetry.com/poems/486949-The-Bitter-Seeds-
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
oh, thank you, Ashok)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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sara irizarry More than 1 year ago
great verse, tells a sad story, but well expressed. the similes you used are spot on, very good poem
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Sara)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
NICE
Dave Ratcliffe More than 1 year ago
What a wonderful read this is, it holds the attention with your mastery of the descriptive word. The story is one of heartache and loss with great emotional pain, without cliche or forced rhyme. Beautiful job Dan Please take a look at this for me http://poetry.com/poems/587412-Hate-and-the-Torment-troubled-species-
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you much, Dave)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
NICE
Felicia Kirby More than 1 year ago
Your an amazing writer. I loved it
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Asim Nehal More than 1 year ago
Very well written, I liked the flow and message....Wonderful.
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you a lot, Asim)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Jon Otano More than 1 year ago
You displayed a lot of pain in your poem.
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Jon)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
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Ayubkhan U More than 1 year ago
Nice
Den Khaustov More than 1 year ago
thank you, Ayubkhan)
Joyce Anthappen More than 1 year ago
NICE
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