fredda.sjoman
  Junior Member

Thank you very much! Nice to see a distinguished member of the community appreciate your poetry.

For masterfully rhythmic and natural verses in a romantic ode to the environment we routinely forget to see.

that's high praise! I'm glad it meant something to you.

Contrasted with others, it shows restraint and maturity. It is delicate and deliberate, constrained in scope and mass. It doesn't say a single word that isn't necessary, and every word has a contributing meaning. The rhyme works well, a metre is observed and well executed, and the language is original and sophisticated. The picture, the soul of the poem, is also effective and interesting. Who looks out at the trees in winter and sees a freezing and pining beggar? Well, the artist. This artist. The connection to those trees and the image they convey is well done, moving. more »

I thought about this recently as well, and the image I got was an epiphany, which struck me with the force of terrible revelation. You have of course seen beggars (although nowadays perhaps it isn't always obvious who they are - at least in poorer countries and in the past they are real), but you haven't looked in their eyes. God, there can be unbearable tragedy there at times.

I think this poem does a good job of communicating that feeling. Although not telling of the worst tragedies of history, whose image struck me, but perhaps of a more relevant kind. I feel it uses mild and simple language, which admittedly might suit the milder subject case and makes it less affected, but the greedy romantic in me wishes for a more vivid emotional portrayal, perhaps more personal commentary of the life of a beggar, giving more insight into that striking perspective. But make of that comment what you will.

In any case, very enjoyable! more »