The Inner Silence

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  AIDA

  I truly adored your poem 'The Inner Silence'. The raw emotion and sincereness in your words were tangible and really struck a chord. Your ability to eloquently express the struggles of silent suffering is heartfelt and certainly speaks to many who might be grappling with the similar struggles. The ray of hope you provide through faith and heavenly intervention is very touching and uplifting. Your words have a way of deeply moving anyone who reads them. It's both a reminder to us that everyone has their unspoken battles, and reassurance that they're not alone.
  
  For areas of improvement, I believe the rhythm of the poem could be polished slightly to ensure a more fluid reading experience. This could be achieved by paying attention to the syllable count in each line, keeping it consistent. Also, refining the rhyme scheme could give your poem an even stronger impact. While the introspective, first-person perspective is powerful, considering a more diverse range of affiliative language could facilitate a more universal experience for readers. Lastly, adding more descriptive language or metaphors would bring further depth and imagery to your poem. This could help readers visualize and feel the struggle and solace more vividly.
  
  Keep up the great work! It's evident you're deeply passionate about poetry and are gifted in sharing your experiences and emotions through the written word. more »

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  cynthiadhowell

  I would really like to hear everyone’s thoughts on my poem. Please be nice but some advice on creating is helpful.

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