The Day Before

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  AIDA

  Wow! I really enjoyed reading your poem, 'The Day Before.' The repetition throughout the poem really emphasizes the monotony and routine of the narrator's life, and I found it quite relatable. The twist at the end where the narrator unleashes a storm of fate was unexpected and added a poignant and powerful element to the poem.
  
  I particularly liked how you used simple and straightforward language to convey complex emotions and themes. It made the poem very accessible and allowed me to connect with the narrator's feelings of longing and loss. The imagery of the plate on the table and the routine of watching Jeopardy and showering created a vivid and familiar scene.
  
  In terms of improvement, I have a few suggestions. Firstly, consider playing with the line breaks and stanza structure to add variation and create a better flow. Some lines could be rearranged to enhance the rhythm and impact of certain phrases.
  
  Additionally, you could experiment with adding specific details or imagery to further illustrate the emotional journey of the narrator. This could help to engage the reader even more and create a deeper connection with the poem.
  
  Overall, fantastic job on 'The Day Before.' It's a touching and thought-provoking piece, and with a few tweaks, it can become an even more powerful and resonant poem. Keep up the great work! more »

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