Analysis of As you..

Jubiya 2014 (Delhi)



Everything turns grey around
me, a starving being;
as you disengage your hands
from these craving hands of mine.

Two colours unrepetantly mixed
forming a new shade
everyone got fascinated, only I
saw the pain of leaving the genuineness.

Human writes to stars,
"Why do you break?"
it whispers, "It makes the happy,
and I want them smile."

You disappeared, leaving a note that I
need no one, as I'm smiling on my own.
But my dear, you aren't a star,
but that moon,  which gives me peace.


Scheme XXXX XXAX XXXX AXXX
Poetic Form
Metre 101101 101010 1100111 1110111 1111 10011 101100101 10111001000 10111 1111 11011010 01111 101100111 1111110111 11111001 1111111
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 490
Words 92
Sentences 6
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 16
Letters per line (avg) 24
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 98
Words per stanza (avg) 22

About this poem

Thiss is not a love you poem purely, but can be read as one, confessing his/her feelings.

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Written on October 16, 2021

Submitted by jubiyakhatoon on October 16, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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