Analysis of This Aging Vehicle



There are times these days,
Than ever before I either ignored.
Or thought sounds to crack,
Came from the floor.
To touch.
After slowly getting out of bed.

Oh...
Dear God?
This vehicle driven I am in.
Blessed and becoming everyday aware,
That the outside of it...
May need more of my time to get started.
In the mornings when I begin,
Making attempts...
To polish and restore a youthful glow.
That took less effort so many years ago.
Seem to be making my moods,
More cranky to notice for no apparent reason.
Dear Father up above?
What's happening with that?
Please, Dear God...
Don't bombard me today with the facts.

Yet only I know,
What it takes to maneuver through...
A keeping up,
With today's fast moving traffic.
Doing it better done to stay in my own lane.
Although admittedly tempted,
To yield to a fading hot head of desires.
Believing the embers are there.
But only sparks remain of the fire.

And,
Sometimes glad I am...
Having no one,
Close or near to hear...
My complaints of aches and pains.
Kept to myself.
And not to blame,
On the obviousness that it could be the age...
Of the vehicle I am in.
Needing more than wax to polish back,
That youthful glow.

Slowing down.
Regardless of which foot I use...
To move both feet,
As fast as I can to the bathroom!


Scheme XXAXXX BCDEXFDXBBXGXXCX BXXXXFXEX XXGXXXXXDAB XXXX
Poetic Form
Metre 11111 1100111001 11111 1101 11 101010111 1 11 110010110 1001010101 101111 1111111110 00101101 1001 1100010101 11110110101 1111011 1101101101010 110101 110011 111 101101101 11011 11110101 0101 10111010 101101110111 1010010 111010111010 01001011 1101011010 0 01111 1011 11111 1011101 111 0111 101111101 10100110 101111101 1101 101 01011111 1111 11111101
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,271
Words 283
Sentences 33
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 6, 16, 9, 11, 4
Lines Amount 46
Letters per line (avg) 21
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 193
Words per stanza (avg) 47
Font size:
 

Written on June 17, 2022

Submitted by lpahtillah on June 17, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

1:25 min read
5

Discuss this Lawrence S. Pertillar poem analysis with the community:

0 Comments

    Citation

    Use the citation below to add this poem analysis to your bibliography:

    Style:MLAChicagoAPA

    "This Aging Vehicle" Poetry.com. STANDS4 LLC, 2024. Web. 20 May 2024. <https://www.poetry.com/poem-analysis/130144/this-aging-vehicle>.

    Become a member!

    Join our community of poets and poetry lovers to share your work and offer feedback and encouragement to writers all over the world!

    May 2024

    Poetry Contest

    Join our monthly contest for an opportunity to win cash prizes and attain global acclaim for your talent.
    11
    days
    21
    hours
    59
    minutes

    Special Program

    Earn Rewards!

    Unlock exciting rewards such as a free mug and free contest pass by commenting on fellow members' poems today!

    Browse Poetry.com

    Quiz

    Are you a poetry master?

    »
    Which poet is associated with the poem "I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings"?
    A Ralph Waldo Emerson
    B Maya Angelou
    C Langston Hughes
    D Emily Dickinson