Analysis of What the Lake Saw



The Moon saw itself on the face of a drowsy lake and said,
"I'm powerful."
The lake shimmered in amazement at the Moon's greatness.
Recognizing a watery surface,
the Moon panicked and thought,
"I'm drowning."

A woman looked closely at herself in the lake's mirror and said,
"I'm beautiful."
The lake rippled its surface in agreement
and the woman thought,
"except for those wrinkles."

A firefly danced at the water's edge thinking no one was watching and said,
"I'm happy."
The lake swayed with the music too,
but its timing wasn't as perfect as the firefly's.
The dancer saw its wavering twin and thought,
"why do I try?"

A painter nearby sighed peacefully as he bent over his work.
The lake slid gently onto the rocky shore and back again with its own bubbling sigh.
The man threw down his brush and said to the lake,
"why are you making fun of me?"

So man and woman,
firefly,
Moon,
to the lake won't be returning soon.
While water waves and ripples on
to anyone who comes along.


Scheme ABCCDX ABXDX AEXCDF XFXE XFGGXX
Poetic Form
Metre 011011011010101 1100 0110001010110 100010010 011001 110 0101101010011001 1100 01101100010 00101 011110 010110101101111001 110 01110101 111010101101 01011100101 1111 0101111001111011 0111010010101011111001 01111101101 11110111 11010 10 1 101110101 11010101 1101101
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 989
Words 209
Sentences 13
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 6, 5, 6, 4, 6
Lines Amount 27
Letters per line (avg) 28
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 151
Words per stanza (avg) 35

About this poem

Sometimes we are the lake, trying to share a good thought which is misinterprered by others. Sometimes we are the firefly, unable to enjoy moments because others may be watching.

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Written on August 05, 2022

Submitted by BCByron on August 15, 2022

Modified on March 23, 2023

1:04 min read
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B.C. Byron

Author of illustrated children's book A CAT NAMED LUMP Available on Amazon more…

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