Analysis of Captive Twelve Year Old

Douglas Blair 1951 (London)



Her eyes say she must not emote
Dining with parents, stiff, proper.
Probably twelve and posh school.
But she catches my eye
Trying not to show
Desperation
In a controlled day
A controlled meal.
A controlled life.
I hear the name Eleanor
Please eat up.
‘The concert is in forty-five.’
Hair auburn and piled at the back.
Single pearl pendant.
Maroon dress cut far too long.
I see those legs in muddied shorts
Other times.
Down by the Creek alone.
Setter dog General
Playing in the reeds.
A pause as mallards
Wing whistle overhead.
Rumbling thunder interrupting.
Parents will be upset.
Whether to stay, and delight in a soaking.
(Or to lower head and run home?)
Nah, that would take another Life.
Another chance.
She winks at me.
And I, likewise.


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Poetic Form Tetractys  (43%)
Etheree  (40%)
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Characters 747
Words 151
Sentences 21
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 30
Lines Amount 30
Letters per line (avg) 19
Words per line (avg) 4
Letters per stanza (avg) 582
Words per stanza (avg) 131
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Written on January 20, 2023

Submitted by dougb.72572 on January 20, 2023

Modified by dougb.72572 on January 20, 2023

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Douglas Blair

Blogging poems since 2008. Once a lawyer in general practice. Then 32 years as Shipper in a heavy metal fabricating plant. Retired 2022. Married and father of two. Poet. Hiker. Harmonica Busker. Gospel enthusiast. Photographer. http://shootdempix.blogspot.com/ more…

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