Analysis of The immovable mountain



This perilous tug of war must cease
my hands are burnt and weary
from grasping a rope
that must be relinquished

For I have attempted to conquer
an impossible mountain
my back has begun to surge with pain

The reality here is inevitable
no longer can I change
what is beyond my grasp

In heartfelt desperation
I have embraced an illusion
a fantasy for which there is
no happy conclusion

Insecurity and fear have molded you
into an unemotional iceberg

Our bedroom once was like the Carriibean
now I'm sleeping in Antartica

I extended my deepest aspirations to you
upon a fine sterling platter
only to receive an empty gray plate

There was a brief moment
I witnessed the door slightly ajar
abruptly it slammed violently shut

So much time has vanished
too many vain attempts

Nonetheless I will not concede to defeat

Your eyes are sealed shut
now to a narrow mindset
and a self loathing soul

An invaluable lesson is painfully learned
I cannot change someone else
only myself for the better

Now I observe the birth of a butterfly
as a blast of fresh soothing air
soars within
charred hands have begun to heal

Your feet are covered in cement
while mine stand at the start line
of the doorway leading to the rest of my life

Mountains don't move
but you can


Scheme XXXA BCX XXX CCXC DE CE DBX XXF AX X FXX XXB XXXX XXX XX
Poetic Form
Metre 110011111 1111010 11001 111010 111010110 1010010 111011111 0101101000 110111 110111 01010 11011010 01001111 110010 0100011101 011010010 10111101 111001 101011001011 01011010 1010111011 110110 110011001 0101110001 111110 110101 0111101101 11111 110101 001101 101001011001 110111 1011010 1101011010 10111101 101 1110111 11110001 1111011 10110101111 1011 111
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,265
Words 245
Sentences 1
Stanzas 15
Stanza Lengths 4, 3, 3, 4, 2, 2, 3, 3, 2, 1, 3, 3, 4, 3, 2
Lines Amount 42
Letters per line (avg) 24
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 68
Words per stanza (avg) 15

About this poem

One of the hardest lessons in life for many of us to learn is that we cannot change someone else only oursleves attempting to change someone else is like trying to move an immovable mountain

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Submitted by markl.65734 on February 06, 2023

Modified on March 05, 2023

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