Analysis of The Cloud



I get trapped in my mind,
The prison bars locked tight.
Alone with my thoughts I'm confined,
Unable to escape the eternal fight.

I reach for help,
But it isn't there.
Noone can save me from myself,
But does anyone even care?

I struggle, then I fail.
The crippling exhaustion sets in,
With a numbing sensation I exhale.
Hearing the voices my head starts to spin.

As the blade cuts the surface,
The release courses through my veins,
Pressing deeper with an oppressed rage and purpose,
Only temporarily breaking the chains.

Quiet and alone,
In the darkness I sit,
Carved to the bone,
Caressing every slit

These wounds gape open,
But I don't want to heal.
Shattered and broken,
The burn reminds me to feel.

Such a physical toll,
Just to vacate the mind.
I relinquish my soul,
To leave everything behind.

This pain I can take,
To stop the torment.
The emotions I can't fake,
This anguish I must vent.

Oh but the blood starts to congeal,
As the holes close shut.
Again my mind beings to reel
And the knots reform in my gut.

And so, the cycle repeats.
The voices get loud,
And my energy depletes.
I disappear into the psychological cloud.


Scheme ABAB XCXC DEDE FGFG HIHI JKJK LALA MNMN KOKO PQPQ
Poetic Form Quatrain 
Metre 111011 010111 01111101 01010100101 1111 11101 111111 1110101 110111 010001010 1010010101 1001011111 1011010 00110111 101011011010 1001001001 10001 001011 1101 0101001 11110 111111 10010 0101111 101001 111001 101011 111001 11111 1101 0010111 110111 11011101 10111 01111011 00101011 0101001 01011 0110001 10101001001
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,142
Words 252
Sentences 20
Stanzas 10
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 40
Letters per line (avg) 22
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 88
Words per stanza (avg) 21

About this poem

This articulates the vicious cycle of a mental health struggle and the unhealthy battles some fight.

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Written on January 29, 2023

Submitted by Mrsdimes18 on January 29, 2023

Modified on March 29, 2023

1:16 min read
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Kayla Nichols

I'm a first responder that dabbles in writing, graphic design, and creating items for my business. I enjoy writing and find healing properties from reading and writing. It has helped with various anxieties. I aspire to some day have my work published and share my work with others. more…

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