Analysis of "Our" Spot



You wallow and cry.
I sit ideally by,
While you suffer inside

The rain drops from the sky
To wish you good night.
I do the same but from far away,
Hoping one day you'll hear
The things I have to say

I look upon you from a distance.
you turn,
and face me
showing me that you're ready to listen.
I'm captivated and yearning for that instance.

You're drawn out in my mind.
Every detail of every fine line.
I'm wishing for you to understand
That I'm ready for you to be mine
No matter how much you cry
You have never left my mind
Even on the day I knew you would never be mine.

You still wallow and cry.
While I sit on the sidelines.
for I can never take the place,
where you suffered for all that time.
I look at the sky and understand why.


Scheme AAX AXBXB CXXXC DEXEADE AXXXA
Poetic Form Tetractys  (36%)
Metre 11001 110101 111001 011101 11111 110111101 101111 011111 110111010 11 011 1011110110 11000101110 111011 10001110011 11011101 111011111 1101111 1110111 1010111111011 111001 111101 11110101 11101111 111010011
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 742
Words 169
Sentences 13
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 3, 5, 5, 7, 5
Lines Amount 25
Letters per line (avg) 23
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 113
Words per stanza (avg) 30

About this poem

This poem was a forgotten work I did for a coworker of mine that I happen to never give to them. This is not from personal experience, just a dream I had about a shy boy and a girl that needed him.

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Written on April 15, 2020

Submitted by T.B.Lauretta on February 15, 2023

Modified on March 14, 2023

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