Analysis of Awaken



He’s about to see another way,
Like a feather lifted on the hot breath
of the private hell  
where crushed souls lay crouching, fragile,
straining for that glimpse
they’ve invested a lifetime in believing.
Hope will unfold like a golden Poppy renewed,
a fragile bloom strengthened by faith,
shedding the unawakened nightmare.

He knows not why he spiraled down.
Nary a glimpse then.
There was no stopping, no redemption.
No awakening from the Inferno.
Until with just a glimpse, hope found him.
Was the journey a test, a demand of proof that
his lifetime believing was right?
Or was it to show that You can.
He fears he will visit again.
Another glimpse can stop it before it starts.
Unless You can’t or won’t.


Scheme XXXXXXXXX XAXXXXXXAXX
Poetic Form Etheree  (30%)
Tetractys  (20%)
Metre 101110101 1010101011 10101 11111010 10111 1010010010 110110101001 01011011 10011 11111101 10011 111101010 1010010010 011101111 101001001111 1101011 11111111 11111001 01011110111 011111
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 724
Words 143
Sentences 12
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 9, 11
Lines Amount 20
Letters per line (avg) 28
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 280
Words per stanza (avg) 62

About this poem

This is an ekphrastic poem commenting on a piece by artist Nola Naff and written as part of the Arts Meets Poetry Contest held annually in McKinney TX. It won third place. The lone soul depicted in the piece could be at the start of a downward spiral of depression and despair or emerging from that spiral and reaching for the light of hope. I chose to see the latter. He’s dazed from a journey not of his making; puzzled why he made it did and fearful that it might happen again, despite his prayers that it won’t.  

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Written on December 08, 2022

Submitted by Briancummingssr on March 24, 2023

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Brian Cummings

Brian Cummings has written and self-published two cookbooks and countless articles, press releases and speeches over a long career in journalism and public relations. His poems have been published in the Ariel Chart International Literary Journal, Stick Figure, and one was featured in the April 2022 issue of cc&d magazine. He is retired and lives near Dallas. more…

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