Analysis of Leisure



The arguments were always the same,
A broken record stuck in my mind,
She thought that love needed leisure,
Time to savour every single moment,
While I found pleasure in working, a bum,
I knew that I wasn't the only one.

I'd honed my skills as a puncher of timeclocks,
Until I was the best I could be, but as a lover,
I'd failed time and time again, feeling like a bum,
Lost and helpless, my heart aching with shame,
I longed for someone to cherish each moment,
But I couldn't see how leisure was the answer.

My partner worshipped the idea of leisure,
She believed it was the only way to be truly alive,
While I fought to make the most of every single moment
Earnestly working, but never neglecting my lover,
It seemed though, that no matter how hard I tried, the shame
Was always just beneath the surface, like a festering boil.

I couldn't shake the feeling that I was just a bum,
That I should have been living a life of more leisure,
But I couldn't help the way I was, and I felt the shame
Closing in on me, making me feel like I wasn't alive,
Until I heard her voice, telling me she loved me, and I knew it was true, my lover,
Forever ready to share in every precious moment.

Time seemed to take on an entirely new moment,
As we loved through the night, like we were young and free from any worries, not even close to a bum,
With our passions exploding, our hearts racing, and our bodies entwined, my lover
Showed me the beauty of leisure,
We were both alive, and it was then I knew that life without moments like this, was such a shame,

No longer would I feel the sting of that old shame,

My days spent working would be memory, while the moments spent with my lover
Would be cherished forevermore, and leisure, I soon learned, was no shame,

Yes, the arguments had been the same,

But now I saw that I didn't have to be a bum,

For I'd discovered the love that came with leisure, a gift from my beautiful lover.


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Poetic Form
Metre 01000101 010011011 11111010 1111001010 1111001001 1111100101 111110111 01110111111010 111010110101 1010111011 1111110110 111011101010 110100010110 101110101111001 111110111001010 10010110010110 1111110111101 11101010101001 1101010111101 1111110011110 11101011101101 100111011111001 011101101111011111110 010101101001010 1111110100110 111101110101110101101101 11010010101100101001110 11010110 10101011111110110111101 110111011111 1111011100101011110 11101010111111 101001101 1111111011101 110100111110011110010
Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 1,922
Words 405
Sentences 5
Stanzas 10
Stanza Lengths 6, 6, 6, 6, 5, 1, 2, 1, 1, 1
Lines Amount 35
Letters per line (avg) 42
Words per line (avg) 10
Letters per stanza (avg) 148
Words per stanza (avg) 37
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Written on May 17, 2023

Submitted by JoeStrickland on May 17, 2023

Modified by JoeStrickland on May 17, 2023

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I'm just a regular, blue collar, working stiff who took an interest in writing poetry many years ago but until recently I haven't had a desire to share any with anyone or pursue publication. I'm an unpublished fork lift operator by night, and a day drinker by choice. I can be followed on Twitter @JoeStricklandSC more…

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