Analysis of Empty Sea of Sheets



In the bareness of night, defenseless and unmasked
Floating in a sea of pillows and sheets
My lover and I, carefree with hands clasped
No wrongs in the dark but stolen heartbeats

The gentle warm tide took us out to the deep
Our bodies rolled in waves of rippling bliss
We swore bond’s vow to eternally keep
As we laughed while we splashed and drank love’s kiss

With fixed eyes locked in unwavering gaze
We held tight as the storms surge and subside
Till her eye caught a figure in the distance haze
Prowling shadows; for he thirsts that love should die

With sweet words and forked tongue, he whispered to her
My nightmare wrapped in alluring disguise
She hypnotically listened till truth was a blur
Trading love she had for his counterfeit lies

A smirk of his mouth came wayward pealing thunder
Severing us two in the vast cotton sea
Helpless I watched, my devotion he plundered
As I pled to my darling, come back to me

Empty eyes smiled back as he took her far hidden
In his wicked cold grasp, she has chosen to be
The dark place she’s now, I am pushed out forbidden
Done are hot days of cool lips and weak knees

Alone I count stars in this dreamless expanse
This place we once hid to find slumbers embrace
Insomnia laughs as I dream there’s a chance
And scream silent, as half of myself is erased  

Now drowning in sheets of this watery grave
I reach out; feel her sleep with no care
Pour out my heart’s mission, our marriage to save
But though with me, she’s no longer there


Scheme XAXA BCBC DXDX EFEF EGXG HGHX IXIX JKJK
Poetic Form Quatrain  (63%)
Metre 00111010001 1000111001 110011111 110011101 01011111101 101010111001 1111101001 1111110111 1111001001 1111011001 101101000101 1011111111 11101111010 111001001 111011101 1011111101 01111110110 10011001101 10111010110 11111101111 101111110110 011011111011 011111111100 1111111011 0111101101 1111111101 01001111101 01101111101 11001111001 111101111 111110101011 111111101
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,526
Words 314
Sentences 1
Stanzas 8
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 32
Letters per line (avg) 37
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 148
Words per stanza (avg) 35
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Written on July 12, 2023

Submitted by David_Zeoli on July 12, 2023

Modified by David_Zeoli on September 28, 2023

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