Analysis of Deep blue

Charles Fields II 1955 (Fort Bragg, NC)



You met me
in a place where time stood still

In profile, a perfect angel.
Though i, had not the will

to try, to win you over,
having bigger fish to kill

you challenged me,

to do the only thing i'd ever known
to calm my aching heart.

Took me back through my life,
made me look deeper inside

than anybody knew and so, did you.
Together in a way, we connected dots.

Found uncertain truth,
turned yourself inside out,

paid a higher price than gold.

Changed the pattern of your pathway
So completely …that when you called

You touched my lifeline with your own

Took my half and made it whole

Called me to you every hour as we spoke
On the phone with reassurance in your voice

In a tone steady and sure,
gave promise Where i had not much left to lose...

You Made your choice, before i ever knew
What you had come there for

and once again the lifeboat i was in
was back on course

Had fortunes smile and hope
For new journeys to begin,

a worthy prize to win
Gave my becalmed sails new wind,

when there was no way out,
but further in.

Without hesitation
You; took me from the shelf,

where the pattern of my belief
no longer supported me,

read between the lines,
 took my hand, saved me from myself.

Something, you would never do
for someone else

Even though, i never asked this of you,
You dared take the chance. Thank you!

(Doing the dance)

When you first touched me
i was in distant blue

Beyond reach of anyone
and headed for a fall

i knew was sure come,
as i had no one

Close enough, to bring me back
from where i stood crippled, alone

with no song in my heart,
i cried knowing it was time to lose,

shed my tears and run.
i chose between a vision and my pride

So as i slipped, released my grip,
Near effortlessly transitioned into a swan dive

Surrendered my all…
fell, twisting, turning

Guided from within,
you were the focus of my dreams.

A way, while i had no means

To give more than another task for you
To catch hell for as you, too were barely hanging on.

Together, we dropped further
down the well of souls into the awaiting abyss…

Where you caught me.

Did what no one else
Had ever done,

met me with open arms,

Gave me your truth
where i had none

With you
i feel a song Blossom

In my heart

Copyright ©2023 CEF2


Scheme AB XB CB A DE FG HX IJ X XX D X XX XK HX LX XL LX JL MN XA XN HO HH X AH MP QM XD EK MG XX PX LX X HX CX A OM X IM HQ E F
Poetic Form
Metre 111 0011111 0100110 111101 1111110 1010111 1101 1101011101 111101 111111 1111001 1100010111 01000110101 10101 101011 1010111 1010111 10101111 1111111 1110111 111110010111 1011010011 0011001 11011111111 1111011101 111111 010101110 1111 110101 1110101 010111 1101111 111111 1100 01010 111101 10101101 1100101 10101 1111111 1011101 111 1011101111 1110111 1001 11111 110101 011110 010101 11111 11111 1011111 11111001 111011 111011111 11101 1101010011 11110111 11000101011 01011 11010 10101 10010111 0111111 1111010111 1111111010101 0101110 1011101001001 1111 11111 1101 111101 1111 1111 11 110110 011 101
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 2,320
Words 534
Sentences 15
Stanzas 44
Stanza Lengths 2, 2, 2, 1, 2, 2, 2, 2, 1, 2, 1, 1, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 1, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 1, 2, 2, 1, 2, 1, 2, 2, 1, 1
Lines Amount 78
Letters per line (avg) 22
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 39
Words per stanza (avg) 10
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Written on 2018

Submitted by Charles2 on September 14, 2023

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