Analysis of With a dying heart

Charles Fields II 1955 (Fort Bragg, NC)



You left me
alone

And in my final hours
of desperation

I call out to you
in a silent prayer

Calling to the Creator
To give one last sign

As i give up on me

Send a prayer to you
Of my love

Which is not a fluke

As my last cries
fading to cosmic echoes

Leaves the flesh
of my tormented heart

After all my failure
was only human

My soul speaking naturally
to you

Even as my spirit is being wrenched
From my broken flesh

Sending a message in a bottle
No this was not a test

What i told you was all true
I needed you Too

much not have you
I failed As you did not hear my call

And so as i fell to my death
down the spirit well

Phase-shifted
to Essence-heaven

Or fallen into the echoes
of spirit=Hell

Waiting for
the recognition signal

In answer
from you

but somehow
cannot get through

Holding on
with my last heartbeat

hear
this Cry of love

as i enter the vortex
of an alternate-reality

enter a time bender
meet my ancestors

sign the logbook
into the ethereal realm

Crossing the bridge
into never more

Wishing all the happiness to you
I could not bring


Scheme AX BC DX EX A DF X XG HX EC AD XH IX DD DX XJ XC GJ KI ED XD XX XF XA EB XX XK DX
Poetic Form
Metre 111 01 0011010 1010 11111 00101 1010010 11111 111111 10111 111 11101 1111 1011010 101 11101 101110 11010 11101000 11 1011101101 11101 100100010 111101 1111111 11011 1111 111111111 01111111 10101 110 11010 11001010 1101 101 001010 010 11 11 1011 101 1111 1 1111 1110010 1110010 100110 1110 101 01001001 1001 01101 101010011 1111
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,128
Words 273
Sentences 1
Stanzas 28
Stanza Lengths 2, 2, 2, 2, 1, 2, 1, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2
Lines Amount 54
Letters per line (avg) 15
Words per line (avg) 4
Letters per stanza (avg) 30
Words per stanza (avg) 7
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Written on March 04, 2007

Submitted by Charles2 on October 07, 2023

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