Analysis of Her Eyes



I'll be staying in the city for a while so I rented a room
It's on the 2nd floor and I arrived exactly at 12 noon
Before climbing the stairs, the door leading to the basement caught my attention
I peeked through the small hole to satisfy my curious sensation

I started having nightmares since I moved here
At night, some weird noises I can often hear
From time to time, I still peek through that hole
To see the inside of it is my biggest goal

Until came the day that I'll be going back home
I saw the landlady sitting somewhere alone
I asked her about the door going to the basement
I was in total shock to hear her creepy statement

"A girl tenant of mine committed suicide
And that's exactly where she died!"

I can feel my heart beating fast inside
I cleared my throat and abruptly replied

"I peeked through that hole many times before
But the only thing I can see is a light blue color
Is the room perhaps painted with that hue?"
She responded, "No! But her eyes are light blue!"


Scheme XXAA BBCC XXDD EE EE XXFF
Poetic Form Tetractys  (20%)
Metre 11100010101111001 11011010101011 0110010110101011010 1110111101100010 1101011111 11111011101 1111111111 110011111101 011011111011 1101010101 1100101101010 1101011101010 01101101010 01010111 1111110101 1111001001 1111110101 10101111101110 1010110111 10101101111
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 988
Words 198
Sentences 5
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 2, 2, 4
Lines Amount 20
Letters per line (avg) 39
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 129
Words per stanza (avg) 32

About this poem

Horror and thriller are definitely my cup of tea. This poem was my first attempt to capture those genres in my usual play of rhyme.

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Written on January 09, 2024

Submitted by FLi on January 10, 2024

Modified by FLi on February 08, 2024

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Francelle Ortega

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