Analysis of Collateral Damage



The medics work hard to stop the bleeding
The girl's face is gray with pain
Beneath the bandages
That make a mummy of her

I hold her hand tightly
The thud of the rotor blades drown her moans
I look away

A car bomb shredded through the bazaar
Lashed and tore her tiny body
Her right leg a mangled horror
Her mother's head is missing

We set a perimeter
Secure the scene
Call for Medevac
"Someone's gotta go with the kid"
I raise my hand without thinking
Really I just want to sit down

She clings to my hand with ebbing strength
Her dark eyes glazed over
Her jaw slack
Tears streak her dirty face and mine
She passes out
I squeeze her little hand
I mutter half-remembered prayers
"Please God, don't let her die"

The Blackhawk lands at the FOB
The medics rush her to the surgery
"She'll lose that leg, for sure, but she'll pull through."
"She's lucky."

A little girl who hobbles on one leg
Awkward hops on crutches far too long
Orphaned and pitiful
She's only 8


Scheme AXXB CXX XCBA BXAXAX XBXXXXXX XCXC XXXC
Poetic Form
Metre 0101111010 0111111 010100 1101010 110110 0110101101 1101 011101001 10101010 01101010 0101110 1100100 0101 111 1101101 11110110 10111111 111111101 011110 011 11010101 1101 110101 11010101 111101 011101 0101010100 1111111111 110 0101110111 101110111 100100 110
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 966
Words 192
Sentences 3
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 4, 3, 4, 6, 8, 4, 4
Lines Amount 33
Letters per line (avg) 23
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 108
Words per stanza (avg) 26

About this poem

My recollection of the aftermath of a car bombing in Afghanistan. June, 2009.

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Written on November 26, 2023

Submitted by FrankArt on February 06, 2024

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Francesco Artuso

Disabled combat veteran. Father of 3 wonderful boys. more…

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