Analysis of The Deep End



Swimming in the deep end.
Got you feeling distressed up to your neck.
Cheating death just a little beneath the waves.

Kick and push you fight, trying to stay afloat.
Water going inside your head.  
Got you feeling struggling in the deep end.
Look around no one to pull you out.
Got you searching for the edge.

Taste of that salty sea water inside your throat. Can't feel pain, numbed at the knees.
Drifting away beneath the waves.
That current ever so strong.
With no life preserver to hold on to.

You keep your head up and back straight.
Fearing not to sink. Looking above the sun burning bright above your head.
You count backwards inside your head to remain calm.

A big cloud covers the sun turning the day into dark. You break concentration and you sink and panic. You close your eyes and say this is it. You reach out in one less effort. When you feel a strong grip around your arm. Being pulled out of the water and look up and see a red cross.

When you open your eyes blurred for the moment trying to adjust.
A smile looks back a fallen angel has broken your fall and come to your aid. Start to breath slowly the sun once again comes out from behind the clouds.

To show you, your not done as you lay on
 that raft. The sun rays gently carass your face.
 You feel the waves an endless dream as you float away and thank the Lord


Scheme AXB XCAXX XBXX XCX X XX XXX
Poetic Form
Metre 100011 1110011111 10110100101 10111101101 10100111 11101000011 101111111 1110101 1111011001111111101 10010101 1101011 1110101111 11111011 101111001011010111 111001111011 01110011001011110100110101111011111110111011101101111011101001101011 1110111101010101 011101010110110111111110011011110101 1111111111 1101110111 11011101111010101
Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 1,343
Words 280
Sentences 29
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 3, 5, 4, 3, 1, 2, 3
Lines Amount 21
Letters per line (avg) 50
Words per line (avg) 12
Letters per stanza (avg) 149
Words per stanza (avg) 36

About this poem

I wrote as a way to express sometimes when he hit a wall in life. How we cope and struggle with our own problems. That sometimes feels like we don't find a way out. Other than that........the time I almost drowned.

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Submitted by axbarajas0419 on April 27, 2024

Modified by axbarajas0419 on April 29, 2024

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