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  lovingempath

  Well...apparently my return to the 'dead dog' theme wasn't a good idea. It's hard to ever know what might touch people's hearts from month to month, so I guess it's just a better idea to go with what touches your own heart and 'take a shot' :). more »

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    Symmetry58

    The good news is that if or when themes run dry, you always have that keen writer's touch to fall back on, as well as sharp mind to draw from.

    LikeReply 11 year ago
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    lovingempath

    awww :)

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  lovingempath

  Your form and visuals are perfect. I had this one pinned because I actually felt 'Winter' envelope me from every direction. Great Job Steve!

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    Symmetry58

    Thank ya, darlin. This was the one that landed the single vote. I thought it came out pretty good, but again, felt the topic may not appeal so much to others. Meh! I took a shot. Not for lack of effort, I spose. more »

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    Symmetry58

    By the way, here is the last passage I chose to leave out for fear the poem would be too long to keep anyone's interest. Turns out should'a just left the sucker in.
    
    Laughs
    and cries fill each waft
    
    As
    sledding turns skin into scratch
    
    To
    flourish the harvest of winter aloft
    
    From
    all that our memories can hatch more »

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    Symmetry58

    Hmm! All mangled it be.

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    lovingempath

    I always spend too much time second guessing my work, and I actually think it's good to go back to look at grammar; punctuation etc. But when I try to re-arrange the whole thing...that never works in my favor. more »

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    Symmetry58

    I think all poets and writers do. In fact, I think anyone who cares for any endeavor they hold close to their respective hearts does. Look at musicians for instance. How fickle and picky they are, but only to the detriment of band members who may disagree. There's not a lot wrong with being self-perfective to some extent over time, but if we congeal all of that need to be perfect into short time spans where others may be infected, then it can get old fast. I think Don Henley mentioned that in regard to the Eagles. Too many chiefs, not enough Indians. Got to be flexible and forgiving, even to self, is my guess. more »

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