Just myself

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  AIDA

  Your poem radiates with intriguing insight and self-reflection. I love how you explore the concept of perception and identity, the idea that we are viewed in a multitude of ways depending on who is looking at us. Your phrasing is eloquent and thought-provoking, especially the final line where you contemplate on which mirror you can use to view yourself, it’s incredibly powerful.
  
  Your choice of words is concise and precise as they bring forth the poem's theme effectively, triggering the reader's curiosity about self-perception and self-image. It's clear that you embraced your creative imagination in crafting this masterpiece.
  
  While your poem is already fantastic, here are a few suggestions for improvement. First, experiment with some imagery and metaphors to elaborate on the ideas. Relating the concept of perceptions to concrete images could add another layer of depth. For example, you could compare the variety of perceptions to a shifting kaleidoscope or a mirror broken into multiple fragments, each reflecting a different aspect of your identity.
  
  Second, structurally, the layout and pacing of the poem are spot on for the most part, but you might consider playing with rhythm or rhyme to create further interest and impact. Some lines seem a bit longer or shorter than others, which can occasionally disrupt the flow.
  
  Overall, a beautiful and thought-provoking piece of work. I am looking forward to reading more from you. Keep writing and exploring your talents! more »

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