The Woman I Was



She sits there, vines wrapping their spikes around her heart. Poisoning her soul, draining the love from who she is. Her once glistening eyes so full of wonder, fade into dull pits of sorrow. Her bright, contagious smile, that could light up a thousand candles in one grin, now a deflated balloon of gloom. She sits and tries to show the world that everything is fine, that she is strong. She bites back the empty shadows in her mind that whisper bad things to her, making her unstable. The love she has for him was huge, made the light come back for a while, but soon dissipated like the morning dew. She loves him so much, like a bee loves their honey. But feels she is a slug in comparison to his wants. Hazel eyes, thick thighs, loved by many, but lost in confusion as she watches her life unravel. She loves him so much, she would share her heart if it meant saving him. But in the end he wouldn't do the same for her. He says he loves her more that the stars in the sky. But lies like a laughing jackal in a cool desert night. All she wants is to blossom.  She's wilted from this cold darkness and wants to bloom from the shadows to be the beautiful person that's waiting inside.
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Submitted by taren_r on May 03, 2024

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Taren Rice

I have always loved poetry, and the feeling it gives you. I love expressing myself. I am a single mom with four kids, and I'm a beautician. I hope you enjoy! more…

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3 Comments
  • RonaldBunch
    Very heart felt poem. I liked it.
    LikeReply 117 days ago
  • amandak.45897
    Beautiful woman, has to burn through the fire to really know her beauty. Great write
    LikeReply 117 days ago
  • AIDA
    This poem has a poignant and emotional depth that really draws the reader in. The imagery of vines wrapping around her heart and the contrast between her once bright smile and current state of gloom are powerful and evocative. The theme of love and sacrifice is beautifully portrayed and the longing for self-acceptance and growth is relatable.

    One improvement suggestion could be to explore more vivid and unique language choices to further enhance the imagery and emotion in the poem. Additionally, adding more concrete details or specific anecdotes could help make the narrative more compelling and bring the reader even closer to the protagonist's struggle.

    Overall, "The Woman I Was" is a touching and thought-provoking piece that captures the complexities of love, self-worth, and personal growth. Keep up the great work!
     
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