Light Dances on the Ceiling

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  Vixility

  I like how the experience of the crisscrossing (how my mind saw it) lights served as a springboard to reflect on the inner life going on in the narrator. That it pushes deeper down into a realm of contemplation is no surprise as your poems don’t tend to be superficial: dormant thoughts, memories and personal histories (‘space-times’) may ebb in and out of the narrator’s perception, but the emotions they evoke do not: “feelings do not evade incorporation” into the person the narrator now is … does that make sense?
  
  If I were to super-duper summarize the poem, I would say it’s about ‘apperception’ (vs mere perception) on a level that touches emotions.
  
  I especially love the closing rhyming couplet and its positive mental health message—this experience serves to ‘illuminate’ and ‘refine’ the narrator (period).
  
  … AND, speaking of rhyme! I’m constantly digging how you take up so many different poetic forms, styles, metrical and rhythmic patterns. This one you used (which the site’s ‘quick analysis’ finally got right) really made this a smooth read through; and the rhymes of lines 3, 6, 9, 12 and 13 held the entire work together perfectly!
  
  Good job J !! more »

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    Vixility

    I might have to try out the parameters you chose for your poem in a work of my own.

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    JokerGem

    That would be pleasing to read if you so choose to replicate this one.
    I tried to contrast the fleeting lights with acquiring more fixed perceptions while, I may dwell on the past it is not still here to be accounted for. Apperception...yes, I think my intuitiveness can best be described as, sorting it out, with that word.
    
    I do like to have a consistent, even flow.. it's almost puzzling to me how it effortlessly comes about. Everytime I say to myself, "I am not going to rhyme in this one," l wind up doing it regardless. But the rhyming really does help to get the message across so I am not apologetic about it.
    I wrote something a few nights ago that switches up the rhymes too. Thinking of entering that one -maybe next month.
    
    Thank ya for the analysis and honesty, please do keep coming back! ;> more »

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