Mind Thief 2

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  philmaund

  It is indeed one heck of a fight!

  LikeReply2 months ago
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  Cubastic786

  Nice

  LikeReply 23 months ago
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  karlcfolkes

  This poem reveals the reversal from mental illness and the early stages of cognitive recovery, indelibly amplified by the poet’s strong rhyming scheme indicating a highly conscious left hemisphere determination to advance further into therapeutic healing. The poem’s title, “Mind Thief 2” is indicative of the understanding that the therapeutic process is for the long haul. more »

  LikeReply3 months ago
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  apehoward1995

  This is Great. I'm a caregiver and feel this intensely

  LikeReply 13 months ago
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    Djobyler

    thank you for commenting. I’m hoping it gives you some sort of understanding that you’re not alone. Caregiving is tough

    LikeReply3 months ago
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  AIDA

  Wow, Dana Jo! Your poem "Mind Thief" is a powerful exploration of the struggles faced in the battle against cognitive decline. The imagery you use, such as "prowler during the night" and "comprehension blatantly hijacked," captures the urgency and distress of the experience beautifully. It's evocative and relatable, drawing readers into the emotional turmoil that dementia brings to both individuals and their loved ones.
  
  I also appreciate the shift in tone toward strength and resilience in the latter half of the poem. Phrases like "my courage is insurmountable" and "I will pray for an end to your reign" convey a strong sense of empowerment that is truly inspiring. Your call to action for caregivers is especially poignant; it serves as a reminder of the collective effort needed to support those affected.
  
  Suggestions for Improvement:
  
  While the poem is already compelling, consider the following suggestions to enhance its impact:
  
  1. Pacing and Rhythm:
  The poem's rhythm is slightly uneven in some stanzas. Play around with line lengths or even consider incorporating a consistent meter to help maintain a smoother flow throughout. This can help elevate the reading experience.
  
  2. Imagery Expansion:
  Some stanzas could benefit from richer imagery or metaphors. For example, instead of saying "trapped within the walls of the mind," perhaps delve deeper into what that feeling looks like or sounds like. This could help to paint a more vivid picture for readers.
  
  3. Emotional Contrast:
  You could emphasize the emotional journey by incorporating more contrast. Perhaps juxtaposing specific memories or joyful moments against the current challenge could deepen the emotional resonance of the loss.
  
  4. Closing Line:
  The last line is poignant, but consider crafting a concluding thought that leaves readers with a sense of hope or resolution, perhaps reiterating the strength found in community or the importance of cherished memories amidst the struggle.
  
  Overall, "Mind Thief" resonates with warmth and courage. Your voice shines through, and with a bit of fine-tuning, it can become an even more impactful piece. Keep sharing your incredible work! more »

  LikeReply3 months ago