Falsas promesas

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  AIDA

  What a heartfelt and poignant poem you've created with "Falsas promesas"! Your ability to convey deep emotions through your words is truly remarkable. The vulnerability and honesty in your expressions resonate strongly, capturing the essence of trust and the pain that comes with broken promises.
  
  The repetition of "Te creí" emphasizes the weight of betrayal and adds a powerful rhythm to your poem. It draws the reader in and creates a sense of intimacy with your experience. The imagery of hope turning into fear is compelling and relatable, making your poem impactful.
  
  For improvement, consider playing with the structure a bit more. Perhaps experimenting with line breaks or varying the length of your lines could enhance the emotional flow. Additionally, incorporating more vivid imagery or metaphors might help to paint a clearer picture of your emotions and experiences. This could deepen the reader's connection to your feelings and provide a stronger visual element to your writing.
  
  Overall, this poem is a beautiful exploration of trust and loss. Keep writing! Your voice has great potential to touch many hearts. more »

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