gary_dean
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my reply appeared as a new comment , hope it isn't confusing. My bad.

"...the deliberate thrust of their overlords' hips- " made me say "Wow" at the honesty and graphic truth. I love both versions, only you can decide which comes closest to your vision. I recommend either one, as the best on this critical topic, that I have seen yet. more »

I would say, "stay angry", in this case, to all good people.

This version of the poem seems so much more controlled, but no less angry than the first, and that is absolutely acceptable. The rich desire laissez-faire capitalism, but extreme, with no regulation such as preventing tainted, risky food. Caveat Emptor, let the buyer beware is their Mantra. They will burn down Democracy to prevent paying taxes, and they are, at this moment. If this isn't the time to speak out clearly then no time is. Kudos on your vision and courage. Great piece of work here. more »

you are not alone.

Oh hell yes! this is an appropriately angry poem. Straight to the point, and a stab at greed and sociopathic disinterest in fellow man. There is no context where the current state of American democracy isn't appalling and infused with evil men and women destroying the social safety nets, and global safety nets, we have been building for 70 years. This poem calls it all out. You have my gratitude, Luciana. more »

Thank you, for reading and commenting.

Yours is in your written word that leads the searching to a place beyond brutish oppression and pointless competition. Yours is the quiet song that whispers of the beauty of Lavender. Yours is strength through kindness. more »

good questions. I am satisfied with the answers I have, I can only wonder where you will land with that. Happy searching!

that should say as "opposed" to...

if we identify our "subconscious" thoughts, we become aware of the drives and motivations, then we can resist, altar, or accept them. As about to be driven by them unknowingly.

I'm pleased you liked it. Thank you.

Appreciate that. Thanks.

sometimes you have to stew on them for a while. You'll go when you are ready.

Thanks Mark. Just tossed it out there.