Ava



Ashes slowly embrace the lake
As dawn begins to break
Remnants of once a living soul
Discovered the art of letting go
    Her name was Ava
    Prima ballerina
    Entire universe on her toes
    Delicate beauty like a rose
    A figure radiating elegance
    A dream in just a glance
    Sparkling eyes that softly speak
    Chords of music that we seek
    She danced her heart out so great
    It even reached the heaven's gate
    An intricate bow delivered on stage
    Out of the blue, just turn the page
On that vague chilly night
In the street with flickering light
She felt earth snaps on its axis
After a long day of practice
Woke up in hospital out of breath
Body trembling with cold sweats
Exhausting event as she remembered
Then suddenly her days are numbered
    Frail eyelids connect for her to see
    Her most marvelous memory
    Whispers of familiar melody
    Ice cold breeze of melancholy
    Gentle movements of fragile fingers
    Fearless freedom that still lingers
    Wrath of emotions on her lacy dress
    Undying quest for a lost caress
    It was a piece about a tragic love
    An outcry of pain direct above
    Heartbreaks shown in every step
    Swift graceful turns with unknown depth
    If only she knew that time
    She's close to her finish line
    No doubt she'll use that chance
    To create an endless dance
Her name was Ava
Prima ballerina
She could've been a perfect dancer
But met her demise because of cancer.

About this poem

This poem represents the unspoken words, neither said nor heard. Because no words can describe the pain that cancer can inflict and the lost lives it brings along with it.

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Written on October 11, 2022

Submitted by FLi on October 16, 2022

Modified on May 01, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme aabcDDeefghhiijjkkllmnooppppqqrrsstuvwggDDyy
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,543
Words 272
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 44

Francelle Ortega

 · 1993 · Manila

Player of words to form an art, A writer and poet at heart! ❤ more…

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3 Comments
  • AIDA
    What a stunning and heartfelt poem! Your use of language and imagery truly transported me into the world of Ava, and I could feel every emotion she felt. The way you depicted her passion for dance and her tragic fate was both moving and inspiring.

    If I had to offer any improvement suggestions, it would perhaps be to craft a stronger conclusion to the poem. While the last line is certainly impactful, I couldn't help but feel like there could have been more to wrap up Ava's story and the overall message of the poem.

    That being said, your talent as a writer shines through in every word of this piece. Thank you for sharing it with us!
     
    LikeReply 21 year ago
    • FLi
      Thanks a lot Aida. :) I truly appreciate your great analysis and suggestions.
      LikeReply 11 year ago
  • lovingempath
    This is absolutely beautiful Francelle! You have a very bright future, I can see!
    LikeReply 12 years ago
    • FLi
      I'm fortunate to come across someone who appreciates my works. And to hear those inspiring words coming from a good poet like you brought an extra dose of happiness.

      P.S.
      Cheers to your well deserved win. I can now imagine the amazing poems about to be created beside that cup filled with your favorite drink. :) 
      LikeReply 12 years ago
  • maham.syedain
    I have always loved poems based on nature and I like how the poet has personified the stanzas
    LikeReply 12 years ago
    • FLi
      Thanks a lot for your kind appreciation regarding my work, really appreciate that. Hoping we could all keep the good writing going.
      LikeReply 12 years ago
    • lovingempath
      I love all of the inspiration I get from fellow poets...so I'll be here as long as I'm allowed :). Just reading the emotions and visions offered by others is well worth the price of submitting a poem. We'll see each other soon I hope! 
      LikeReply 12 years ago

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