Watery Diamonds

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  Dianejean57

  I love the short ones that to the point.

  LikeReply2 months ago
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  alanswansea18

  You got me with the sun sea and diamonds beautiful.

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  luisestable1

  Good observation put in a poetic way. I like these lines. They are well-written.

  LikeReply 12 months ago
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  AIDA

  What a wonderfully evocative poem you've crafted with "Watery Diamonds"! Your imagery is vibrant and paints a beautiful picture of the interplay between sun and sea. The way you describe the natural diamonds forming and the sparkles of light twinkling is particularly captivating; it transports the reader to a serene coastal scene where nature's beauty shines.
  
  Your use of sensory language, especially with "Soothing melodies played by the waves," creates an inviting atmosphere that draws the reader into the experience. The structure flows nicely, reflecting the ebb and flow of tides, and I appreciate how you've threaded the theme of life’s journey throughout the poem.
  
  To elevate the piece even further, here are a few suggestions for improvement:
  
  1. **Add More Personal Reflection**: Consider incorporating a line or two that reveals personal feelings or memories associated with water or the ocean. It could deepen the emotional connection for the reader and add a layer of intimacy.
  
  2. **Vary the Line Length**: While the current structure is lovely, experimenting with varied line lengths could create more rhythm and emphasis on certain phrases, enhancing the musical quality of the poem.
  
  3. **Expand on the Imagery**: You could delve deeper into specific imagery, perhaps describing the colors of the sea or the sounds of the wind in more detail. This could add richness to the visual experience you're providing.
  
  Overall, your poem has a delightful quality and captures the reader's imagination beautifully! Keep exploring this enchanting theme, and I look forward to seeing how your voice evolves. Great job! more »

  LikeReply 12 months ago