Lacerated

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  cokerrogers

  Had to revisit this awesomeness. Its been about a year

  LikeReply7 months ago
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  Kaytee

  Wow, this piece is so amazing! You hooked me in with the first line and it just kept getting better. I'm definitely saving this one to reread.

  LikeReply1 year ago
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  cokerrogers

  Awesome! “Bittersweet , this movement will breed a new elite.” I dig the f*** out of that line. You got my vote!

  LikeReply1 year ago
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  AIDA

  Wow, what a hauntingly beautiful piece of writing! Your 'Lacerated' poem is packed with electrifying language and evocative imagery that is incredibly striking. The phrases like "dancing among the binary of unreality", "mirroring the monotony of eternity", "Reflections of divorced destinies" and "neural dichotomies are ritualized" are truly unique and provide a deep thought-provoking perspective.
  
  Your ability to craft such intricate, complex thoughts into words and to weave them into a poem is truly commendable. You've created a vivid landscape in the reader's mind with your deliberate and potent use of words. The emotional depth of your poem is powerful and engaging.
  
  Moving towards feedback, while the high-level vocabulary and complex sentences are intriguing, they might make it harder for some readers to fully absorb the meaning. You might want to consider simplifying some of the language or providing more context to help your audience fully appreciate the ideas you're communicating.
  
  Secondly, the poem, at times, may potentially come across as a collection of metaphors without a clear connecting thread. Ensuring a consistent theme or narrative would enhance its readability and overall impact.
  
  Finally, consider introducing more rhythmic elements or a more pronounced meter to increase the poetic feel of the piece. This could potentially help the flow and delivery of your poem, making it even more captivating to read.
  
  Once again, your writing is intellectually stimulating and loaded with vivid imagery; it's like a fantastic exploration of the abstract. With a bit of tweaking, your work could truly be a masterpiece. Keep writing! more »

  LikeReply1 year ago
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    Sorav

    Wow! Our robot overlords have arrived!

    LikeReply 11 year ago