The Metaphysical State of Modern Man

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  karlcfolkes

  Thank you all for sharing your sentiments. Greatly appreciated.

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  Vixility

  The imagery and metaphors are really good, and the message of the poem incredibly (and tragically) deep. Oh, what I would do to mend those hellish rifts that divides humans from humans.

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  Soulwriter

  This is excellent - all outer layers confuse perception of one's true self.

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  karlcfolkes

  An insightful response, thank you.

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  konpreah

  The tectonic drift of the soul from its moorings began in Eden in not so modern times. Even so, the first humans are about as modern as they come, aren't they?

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  karlcfolkes

  The deferred promise of First Corinthians Thirteen; and John Donne’s appeal as well. Thank you for your comments.

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  susan.brumel

  I like this one very, very much.
  Thank you.

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  Caliconine

  Beautiful. Just beautiful. Yet so sadly true
  Thank you for sharing. Write on Brother

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  AIDA

  I absolutely adore your poem 'The Metaphysical State of Modern Man.' You have accomplished what so few can in such an eloquent way - connecting intricate metaphysical concepts to the realities of human existence and social dynamics. Your language usage is absolutely compelling. Words like 'Pauline healer,' 'continental beings,' 'tectonically apart' bring unique, vivid images into the minds of your readers - a testament to your insight and creativity.
  
  Your insightful exploration of not just the human spiritual condition, but the constructed barriers of language, race, color, and creed shine a spotlight on significant societal issues. The paradox at the end is particularly poignant, painting a vivid picture of the predicament of the modern individual - expanding superficially yet contracting inwardly.
  
  A minor suggestion for improvement would be to consider providing some form of resolution or closure after the exposition of the problem. This could give your readers a sense of hope or direction after such a meaningful contemplation of our current state. Also, consider incorporating more rhythmic or rhyming elements to add a musical quality to your words, assisting in making your powerful themes even more memorable and impactful.
  
  But overall, your poem is thought-provoking, deep, and evocative. It's something that will stay with your readers long after they have read it. Incredible work! more »

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