Elusive Success
I raced up the mountain looking for you,
Among countless others striving too,
To be the first and to be the best,
From childhood we train for this test.
In my haste I passed many by,
Weary, lost souls staring at the sky,
But reaching that summit was my solitary aim,
My unerring shot at wealth and fame.
As slopes grew steeper, less climbers scaled the height,
Many a fallen comrade, in the shadows of the night,
But if I fall back I must bear the blame,
I thought I knew the rules of this game.
Finally, I did conquer the mountain peak,
There your welcoming presence I did seek,
But the top was barren, no flowers in bloom,
And you were nowhere, just misty gloom.
So where else could I venture from there?
Descent was needed, I was aware,
But there was no race and there was no rush,
Time to absorb the tranquil stillness and hush.
On the way, I stopped by the fallen weak,
Help them rise, and guide them to the peak,
And then I see you, in their grateful tear,
The sun has risen and the mist was clear.
So, did I climb a higher peak?
Is this the journey all should seek?
Along the path with humble eyes,
Success, I found you - no disguise!
About this poem
The poem questions the traditional way how we look at Success - which is based on the result or the destination. The poem suggests that the intention, the satisfaction, and the path taken are more significant than the ultimate result when evaluating success. A mountain climbing analogy has been used. The original poem and title were revised in January 2025.
Written on April 23, 2024
Submitted by jn.selvadurai on April 22, 2024
Modified by jn.selvadurai on January 04, 2025
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Quick analysis:
Scheme | AABB CCDD EEDD FFGG HHII FFHX FFJJ |
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Closest metre | Iambic pentameter |
Characters | 1,155 |
Words | 254 |
Stanzas | 7 |
Stanza Lengths | 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4 |
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