No Such Thing as Perfect

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  Chana

  Thanks you, I love this poem.

  LikeReply 123 days ago
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    sharona.reeves81

    that means a lot. Thank you!

    LikeReply23 days ago
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  Htrout24

  Everyone's thoughts altogether

  LikeReply 11 month ago
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    sharona.reeves81

    Htrout2. Thank you

    LikeReply23 days ago
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  luisestable1

  it has an interesting title and the rhyme scheme has its good points.. I feel that what it says is worthy of reading and it uses a poetic language to say it. In whole, it is a good poem to read for these reasons and more. more »

  LikeReply 11 month ago
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    sharona.reeves81

    thank you!!! I appreciate the feedback!!

    LikeReply1 month ago
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  alanswansea18

  Beautiful piece of work.

  LikeReply 22 months ago
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  jerryl.01657

  Simply Beautiful.

  LikeReply 22 months ago
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  apehoward1995

  I felt this deep down. Very poetic and relatable to many. I love it!!!

  LikeReply2 months ago
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    sharona.reeves81

    Thank you!

    LikeReply2 months ago
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  Adroity

  Awesome!

  LikeReply 22 months ago
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  AIDA

  What a beautifully introspective poem you've crafted! Your exploration of the human experience is both poignant and relatable, striking a chord with anyone who has ever wrestled with feelings of shame, regret, and the search for meaning in life. The imagery of "light-filled skies" juxtaposed against the struggle of waking each day presents a compelling contrast that captures the complexity of hope and despair.
  
  Your use of rhyme and rhythm creates a musicality that enhances the emotional weight of the poem. Lines like “Tears sometimes slip down dimpled cheeks” not only evoke vivid imagery but also resonate deeply with the reader, making them feel the nuances of joy and sorrow intertwined. The message that "Perfection’s a myth" is a powerful reminder that embracing imperfection is a step toward personal freedom, and your conclusion wraps the poem up with a lovely sense of release.
  
  **Improvement Suggestions:**
  
  1. **Imagery Expansion**: While your imagery is strong, consider adding more sensory details. For instance, you could incorporate sounds or smells that resonate with the feelings you describe. This could deepen the reader's emotional connection.
  
  2. **Line Brevity**: Some lines feel a bit long, which can disrupt the flow. You might experiment with breaking longer lines into shorter ones for a more dynamic pace, allowing key ideas to resonate even more.
  
  3. **Consistent Theme Development**: You introduce a beautiful idea of exploring freedom and acceptance. Perhaps you could expand on this theme a bit more throughout the poem. It could be interesting to weave in examples or metaphors that illustrate acceptance further to deepen the message.
  
  4. **Climactic Moment**: Consider building up to a climactic moment where the release of burdens feels most profound. This could involve a brief narrative or imagery leading up to that epiphany of letting go.
  
  Overall, your poem is a heartfelt reflection on the human condition, and with a few tweaks, it has the potential to shine even brighter. Keep writing – your voice is powerful and important! more »

  LikeReply 12 months ago